Opening Scenes
Sunday, August 23rd, 2009Cue the Twilight Zone music.
Imagine, if you will, you are coming out of a grocery store. You are pushing your cart and scanning the parking lot as you try to remember where you parked your car.
Suddenly a woman grabs your arm. She cries out that she’s been followed by a stalker. Can you help her? From around the corner, a man appears. He’s carrying what looks like a gun, and, you can tell by the way he’s looking over his shoulder, he’s being chased. He shouts to the woman to run, that he’s not sure how much longer he can hold off the person pursuing him. He grabs her arm and pulls her after him. Blood is streaming down his sleeve.
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Got the scene in your mind? Okay, what did you notice first about the woman? What did you notice first about the man? What emotions swelled up in you at the thought you could be shot by either the man with the gun or the person coming after him and the woman?
You did notice the sex of the people involved. You did notice the gun. You did notice the tone of their voices and the fear on their faces. You saw the man’s bloody sleeve.
But I bet you didn’t stop long enough to take a full appraisal of the two people. You paid no attention to her chestnut hair pulled back in a ponytail or the way his denims fit his butt so well. You don’t know why they are here in your grocery store parking lot. You don’t know what events led up to this moment. You don’t know their hopes (other than to escape) and goals. You don’t know their favorite flavor of ice cream. . .unless one snatches that half gallon out of your shopping bag. You don’t know anything about their families and friends. You don’t even know if they are the good guys or the bad guys.
You did see their fear and the blood.
And that’s what you need to bring into the opening of your book. You want to draw your reader in so quickly she’s already on page 10 by the time she dares to take a breath. Put your characters into the middle of terrible trouble, which can be physical, as in this example, or emotional. The heroine standing in her room waiting to marry the evil man who’s foreclosing on the ranch is a cliche simply because it works so well. The reader is caught up in her emotional turmoil – does she marry Snidely Whiplash or does she believe that Dudley Do-Right will arrive in time to save the day?
But, I can hear you say, how can my readers connect with my characters if they don’t know more about their background, their appearance, and their goals, motivations, and conflicts?
First, trust your reader. If you’ve started your characters at point where they’re in the midst of trouble that is going to require them to risk something physically or emotionally, then the reader is going to connect to them right away. All of us have faced such circumstances, although most of us – I hope – haven’t been chased by a madman through a grocery store parking lot.
Play fair with the reader. Have the first female character introduced (through her point of view) be the heroine. The same rule holds if you start with the hero’s POV. If you begin with the heroine, the first good-looking, take your breath away guy who shows up in the book had better be the hero. I’ve judged contest entries where the heroine is the POV character, and a great guy wanders in to chat with her – but he’s not the hero. That’s very confusing to the reader, who’s already committed herself to seeing how the heroine and that guy are going to work out their “happy ever after”.
You can give quick descriptions of the non-POV character by focusing on things that move the scene along. Assuming it’s the heroine’s POV at the start, you can mention his rough hand gripping her arm with a strength that matches his muscles. Or blood could be seeping through his blond hair and dripping on his broad shoulders. Or she feels a bit more protected because she’s seen that he shoots with the skill of Hans Solo. Or she should have known better than to trust a handsome guy with a scar on his left cheek. Just quick snapshot things, because people really don’t stop to take note of everything during a stressful situation. If they did, witnesses wouldn’t disagree about what happened during an accident or a crime and what the perpetrator looked like. But they sure all know how they feel about what they witnessed. It’s that feeling that lures the reader into the story and has her cheering for the good guys.
Trust yourself and your story. If you put your characters at a crisis point in their lives, you have to show the reader how they cope under such pressure. You’re not telling the reader how the heroine has faced such challenges before and triumphed. Who cares about what happened in the past when the heroine is fleeing with the bloodied hero from the bad guy? All the characters (and the reader) want is for them to escape. The reader wants them to have their “happy ever after” ending as well, but as she is engrossed in that opening scene, she will focus only on hoping they escape.
Later, when you’ve gotten them over that first bump on the sweet primrose path to love (don’t gag, okay? <g>), you’ll have a resting spot where you can give us more information on them and their background. It’s at this point that you allow the secondary characters to have a bit more time “on-stage”. This is where the friend/mother/sister (for heroine) or best buddy (for hero) come into play to provide a reflection for the main character to lay out their goals, motivations, and conflicts. It’s called a reflection character because it keeps the POV character from talking to him/herself.
So hit the ground running either emotionally or physically and emotionally. You need to have that emotional connection established right from the get-go in a romance. Then your reader/editor will immediately become a part of the story and have a high stake in seeing how the characters resolve their differences, confront their fears, and reach their goals as they fall in love.